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Wednesday, March 29, 2006

KCB - Mark 1:45

KCB translates Mark 1:45 as follows:

«ប៉ុន្តែ បុរស​នោះ​បាន​ចេញ​ទៅ រួច​ក៏​ចាប់ផ្តើម​ប្រកាស​ពី​កិច្ចការ​ជា​ច្រើន និង​បាន​ផ្សព្វ​ផ្សាយ​អំពី​រឿង​នេះ ដូច្នេះ​ហើយ​ព្រះ​អង្គ​ក៏​មិន​អាច​យាង​ចូល​ទៅ​ក្នុង​ក្រុង​ដោយ​ចំហ​បាន​ទៀត​ឡើយ ប៉ុន្តែ​ព្រះ​អង្គ​គង់​នៅ​ខាង​ក្រៅ​ក្រុង​ត្រង់​កន្លែង​ស្ងាត់​ៗ ហើយ​មនុស្ស​ម្នា​ពី​គ្រប់​ទិស​ទី​បាន​មក​រក​ព្រះ​អង្គ។»

I felt like this translation deviated from the original Greek farther than most of the passages in the KCB and also caused a couple of things to be unclear in the Khmer.

Here is a Greek Interlinear (with Khmer added) to help:

ο 3588 δε 1161[BUT HE,​ ប៉ុន្តែ​គាត់] εξελθων 1831(5631)[HAVING GONE OUT,​ បាន​ចេញ​ទៅ] ηρξατο 756(5662)[BEGAN,​ ចាប់ផ្តើម​] κηρυσσειν 2784(5721)[TO PROCLAIM "IT",​ ប្រកាស “វា”] πολλα 4183[MUCH,​ ច្រើន] και 2532[AND,​ ហើយ] διαφημιζειν 1310(5721)[TO SPREAD ABROAD, ផ្សព្វ​ផ្សាយ] τον 3588[THE] λογον 3056[MATTER, ​រឿង] ωστε 5620[SO THAT,​ ដូច្នេះ​ហើយ] μηκετι 3371[NO LONGER, មិន​បាន​ទៀត​ឡើយ ] αυτον 846[HE, ទ្រង់] δυνασθαι 1410(5738)[WAS ABLE, អាច] φανερως 5320[OPENLY, ដោយ​ចំហ] εις 1519[INTO "THE",​ទៅ​ក្នុង] πολιν 4172[CITY, ក្រុង] εισελθειν 1525(5629)[TO ENTER;,​ យាង​ចូល] αλλ 235[BUT, ប៉ុន្តែ] εξω 1854[OUTSIDE, ខាងក្រៅ] εν 1722[IN, នៅ​ក្នុង] ερημοις 2048[DESERTED, រហោ] τοποις 5117[PLACES, ឋាន] ην 2258(5713)[WAS, នៅ] και 2532[AND, ហើយ] ηρχοντο 2064(5711)[THEY CAME, គេ​បាន​មក] προς 4314[TO,​ ដល់] αυτον 846[HIM, ទ្រង់] πανταχοθεν 3836[FROM EVERY QUARTER, ពី​គ្រប់​ទិស​ទី​]

And here is a list of changes that I feel should be made:

1) "ប្រកាស​ពី​កិច្ចការ​ជា​ច្រើន" – I feel there is no reason to add "ពី​កិច្ចការ​" being that there is no equivelent in the Greek, and that it does not help the Khmer to come out more clear (in both cases, with "ពី​កិច្ចការ​" being included and without it, the question would still arise in the reader's mind, “What did he proclaim, what work did he proclaim?” which I believe is not a problem (nor does Khmer grammar demand it that I know of), they only need to read farther in the verse to find out, as a reader of the Greek would have to do. English translations normally add the word “it” here but I don't think it is needed in the Khmer, and therefore can better follow the Greek than English allows.

2) "និង​បាន" I don't think there is a need to use "បាន" here again being that it was already used in the beginning of the verse, "បាន​ចេញ​ទៅ" and by not using it again it better follows the Greek.

3) "អំពី​រឿង​នេះ" The author is now speaking outside the story; the event (story) had already taken place (not like the quote from Jesus which uses "នេះ" when He refers to the event) and so I believe this should be translated as, "អំពី​រឿង​នោះ"

4) "ដូច្នេះ​ហើយ" – I don't believe this translation is the best choice in the context for the word, “ωστε” - this is a minor issue, but I feel like the phrase, "រហូត​ទាល់តែ​" is a better reading (an English equivalent might be something like, “to such an extent that”


5) "ព្រះ​អង្គ​គង់​នៅ​" - The KCB chose to translate, “ην” to include "ព្រះ​អង្គ​" but again I don't see this as a necessary addition, being that in Khmer it is understood that it was Jesus who “was there”.

6) "គង់​នៅ​ខាង​ក្រៅ​ក្រុង" – The word ​"ក្រុង" is not in the Greek, nor do I feel it is needed in order to make the translation clear – I suggest the following translation with the addition of "បាន" to ensure readability: "បាន​គង់​នៅ​ខាង​ក្រៅ"

7) "ត្រង់​កន្លែង​ស្ងាត់​ៗ" - This is minor but I feel a better translation of, “ερημοις τοποις” would be, "រហោឋាន" though the meaning of the phrase in the KCB is very close with this alternate translation.

8) "មនុស្ស​ម្នា​" - the addition of "ម្នា​" I think should be removed being that in the Greek there is no specifier as to what “type” of people were coming to Christ (the word "ម្នា​" modifies the word “មនុស្ស" [people] and makes it out to be only common people, but most likely there were rich people as well).

9) "មនុស្ស​ម្នា​ពី​គ្រប់​ទិស​ទី" - I believe the phrase, "ពី​គ្រប់​ទិស​ទី" can and should be moved to the end of the verse in order to better follow the Greek word order.

10) "បាន​មក​រក​ព្រះ​អង្គ" – I believe this translation lends itself to be misunderstood. Did the people only search/look for Jesus or did they find Him? I suggest the following re-translation in order to remove any confusion (being that the Greek clearly states they “ηρχοντο” [came] to Jesus: "បាន​មក​ឯ​ព្រះ​អង្គ​"

A side note is the KCB's usage of the word "ព្រះ​អង្គ". I do not fully understand why it is used so frequently when a word like ទ្រង់ could be used (and to me, that word seems more “natural”). Anyone have some insight into the reasons behind this?


Putting all these suggestions together – I believe the translation should be something like this:

«ប៉ុន្តែ បុរស​នោះ​បាន​ចេញ​ទៅ រួច​ក៏​ចាប់ផ្តើម​ប្រកាស​ជា​ច្រើន​​​ និង​ផ្សព្វ​ផ្សាយ​អំពី​រឿង​នោះ​ រហូត​ទាល់តែ​ព្រះ​អង្គ​មិន​អាច​យាង​ចូល​ទៅ​ក្នុង​ក្រុង​ដោយ​ចំហ​បាន​ទៀត​ឡើយ ប៉ុន្តែ​បាន​គង់​នៅ​ខាង​ក្រៅ​ ត្រង់​ទី​រហោឋាន ហើយ​មនុស្ស​បាន​មក​ឯ​ព្រះ​អង្គ​ពី​គ្រប់​ទិស​ទី​។»

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